英語
高校生

意見文の添削をしていただきたいです!!

Hello everyone,today’s topic is “students should do volunteer work.”
We define that hosted by their school and apply for any volunteer work by myself.
We have two points.
We can make a social contribution and we can learn many things.
I will explain our 1st point.
We believe that doing volunteer work broadens one’s horizons.
According to Japan University of Health Science,volunteer work makes us self-development.
Doing it connects with many kinds of people.
Participants find a new perspective.
For this reason,them minds are inspired by other participants.
Also I learned many things about the situation of the world.
I have participated in volunteer work to clean the beach.
Before I did it,I didn't have an interest in the ocean plastic problem.
But by participating in it,I know that there is a lot of ocean plastic and I was interested in the problem.
Therefore I think students should do volunteer work.
Thank you.

伝えたいこと(日本語)

皆さんこんにちは、今日のトピックは学生はボランティア活動をするべきだ です。
学校主催のものと自分自身で申し込んだものを対象とします。
私たちにはふたつのポイントがあります。
社会貢献を行えることとたくさんのことを学べることです。
1つ目のポイントについて説明します。
私たちはボランティア活動は視野を広げることができると思います。
Japan University of Health Scienceによると、ボランティア活動は自己啓発に繋がります。
ボランティア活動は様々な人と繋がり、参加者は新しい視野を見つけることが出来ます。
これにより彼らの意識はほかの参加者によって刺激されます。
また世界の状況についても多く知ることができます。
私は浜を掃除するボランティアに参加したことがあります。
参加する前は海洋プラスチック問題について興味がありませんでした。
でもそれに参加することにより海洋プラスチックがたくさんあるということを知り、その問題についても興味を持ちました。
これより学生はボランティア活動に参加すべきだと考えます。

長くて申し訳ないですよろしくお願いします!!

Hello everyone,today's topic is "students should do volunteer work. We define that hosted by their school and apply for any volunteer work by myself. We have two points. We can make a social contribution and we can learn many things. I will explain our 1st point. We believe that doing volunteer work broadens one's horizons. According to Japan University of Health Science, volunteer work makes us self-development. Doing it connects with many kinds of people. Participants find a new perspective. For this reason, our minds are inspired by other participants. Also I learned many things about the situation of the world. I participated in volunteer work to clean the beach. Before I did it, I didn't have an interest in the ocean plastic problem. But by participating in it, I know that there is a lot of ocean plastic and I was interested in the problem. Therefore I think students should do volunteer work. Thank you.
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