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TOPIC
Some people say that it is necessary for people to go to important
historical sites in order to understand history better. Do you agree with
this opinion?
POINTS
Experience
Motivation
O Technology

I believe that it is neccessary for people
to go to important histrical Sites in order to
understand history better.
I have two reasons.
One reason is that we can experience.
about
old era.
Because
we can associate.
old architect and ours history text book.
Another reason is that we can know
to see
retail information. For example Vold clothes,
and reading old book, and
should
For those reasons, I'm sure that we.
go to important histrical Sites in order to
understand history better.