Question

ゆとり

英作文（英検二級）の添削をお願いします！
テーマは
家にテレビを持たない人が増えると思いますか？
です！

Ithink that the number of such people wl
incredse in the future.

Firstlywe can get information and news
without a television.

Smartphone is instead of itis useful for us
to get information that we want to know
radpidly.

Secondly,we can see entertainments in
smartphone.

Ithink YouTube is more exciting than TV
prodramS.

lf Ifind exciting video, | can share my
friends who are qpdrt.

So,| think that there will be more such
people in the future.