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When people apply for jobs, some companies have online interviews, and others have face-to-face interviews. There are other choices, too. These days, many companies prefer online interviews.
What are the reasons for this?
Some people think online interviews save time and money because you don't need to travel. Other people say it is easier to schedulè because you can do it from anywhere. Because of this, more companies are adopting online interviews as a standard practice.
On the other hand, some people feel nervous about online interviews because of technical problems. This can be stressful if the internet connection is bad. Some people also miss the personal connection you get in face-to-face interviews. As a result, online interviews have both good and bad points.

要約例
These days, many companies prefer online interviews due to convenience. By doing this, some save time and money with various things, such as avoiding travel and easier scheduling. However, some feel nervous about issues such as technical problems and missing personal connections, which can be stressful.

000 Today, many companies prefer online interviews. By doing so, they can or money this Save time to travel and do it from anywhere, so that it is easier to schedule On the other hand, online interviews have Some problems One of the problems is stressful for people apply for jobs if they cannot connect to the internet..

回答

全体的に簡潔に要約されているとの印象を受けます。
若干の修正をすれば、更に良くなると思います。下記の修正はあくまでも一例です。参考にしてください。

These days, many companies prefer online interviews due to convenience.
→ These days, many companies prefer online interviews [to face-to-face ones] due to convenience.
※就職の面接には2種類あり、[対面式よりも]オンラインの方が利点が多いことを明記する。
By doing this, some save time and money with various things, such as avoiding travel and easier scheduling.
→ By doing this, they(=many companies) think they can save time and money with various things such as travel and scheduling.
※doin this(=オンライン面接をすること) の中には移動を避けることや予定作成の容易さが含まれているので、重複となる
However, some feel nervous about issues such as technical problems and missing personal connections, which can be stressful.
→ However, some feel nervous about technical problems and missing personal connections, which can be stressful for interviewees.

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