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【QUESTION】
These days, many people read digital books on their computers. Do you
think people will stop buying paper books in the future?

two reasons,
I do not think people will stop buying
I have
paper books in the future.
First, digital books.
is
Joes harm your eyes
very unhealthy. Because they have
Because they have bluelisht, which
and brain, you feel tired.
Second, you
can
borrow
and
It
ish enable
You
to
sell
read
paper books.
a lot
much
money
On
4
digital
books.
the other hand, you
For thease. reasons, I
can not
of books without spending
sell
think
many people will buy paper
books.

Answer 1

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IKAKUredpanda ✏️ 🔥👍

こんにちは！中学1年生のIKAKUredpandaです！
とても良いアイディアにわかりやすい文章をしています！いくつか修正をしたので見てみてください👍

修正文：
I do not think people will stop buying paper books in the future. I have two reasons. First, digital books are very unhealthy. Because they have blue light which does harm to your eyes and brain, you feel tired. Second, you can borrow and sell paper books. It enables you to read a lot of books without spending much money. On the other hand, you cannot sell digital books. For these reasons, I think many people will buy paper books.

修正点：
"is" → "are"：digital books は複数なので、"are" に直しました。
"It is enable you" → "It enables you"：正しい文法にしました（"is" は不要）。
"can not" → "cannot"：つづりを正式な形にしました。
"thease" → "these"：スペルミスを直しました。

by IKAKUredpanda

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ありがとうございます！
助かりした！