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英検準2級ライティングの採点をしていただきたいです。訂正お願い致します。

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I think is better living in the city than in the countryside.
First of all, It we are living in the countryside, We Can't
-shopping enough. Shopping make us fun. Second, there are
• few jobs in the countryside. When we chooce a job, we can't
choose enough it. For these reasons, I think is better living
in the city than in the countryside.

英検準2級 英検

Answer 1

omochi

田舎に住むよりも都心に住むほうがいいという意見なのであれば、
田舎の欠点を書くのではなく、都心に住むメリットを書いたほうがいいです！

First of all, if we are living in the country side, we can’s shopping enough.
→ First of all, if we are living in the city, it is easier to go to shopping.

Shopping make us fun.
→ Shopping makes us happy.

Second there are few jobs in the country side. When we choose a job, we can’t choose enough it.
→ Second, there are more jobs in the city. Also we will be able to choose from various jobs.

For these reasons, I think is better living in the city than in the country side.
→ For these reasons, I think it is better living in the city than in the country side.