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ねこ

英作文の添削お願いします。
100点満点で点数も付けていただきたいです。
テーマは「新型コロナウイルスは私たちの生活にどのような変化をもたらしたか」です。

I think the new coronavirus has forced us into changing our lifestyles since 2020. Firstly, we had to refrain from face-to-face communications when this pandemic was occurring.e we could not meet friends and classmates, as a result, we felt depressed. In addition to this, many students could not go school trips or enjoy school festivals, go in for graduation ceremonies. Most workers could not go office and had to remote-work. Secondly, some people lost their jobs and could not make a living, especially people who worked at restaurants or hotels. For these reasons, the new coronavirus had us bad influences.

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文法と内容から直すと良い点を以下にまとめてみました

I think the coronavirus has forced us to change our lifestyles since 2020.
: force A to do

Firstly, we had to refrain from face-to-face communication during the pandemic.
: 複数communications  にしないで不可算名詞あつかい

Since we could not meet friends and classmates, many of us felt depressed. 
: 元の文にあった e はタイプミス？？ 文をカンマで繋ぎ続けるのではなく、接続詞 Since（〜なので）を使います

In addition, many students could not go on school trips, enjoy school festivals, or attend graduation ceremonies. 
: 行事に参加する、attend 

Most workers could not go to the office and had to work remotely. 
: remote-work は副詞的にwork remotely

Secondly, some people lost their jobs and could not make a living, especially those working in the restaurant or hotel industries. 
: those working in...とすると「〜で働く人々」にします

For these reasons, the coronavirus had a negative influence on us. 
: had us bad influences は文法的に誤りで、have an influence on A（Aに影響を与える)という形です

ねこ

ありがとうございます！！！