Question

Y

英検準二級のライティング採点お願いします。

Do you think parents should let their children have their own rooms?

I think that parents should let their children
have their own rooms. I have two reasons.
First, we can consentrate on studying.
This is because it is quiet.
Second, we can protect our private.
So we increase free time.
Therefore, I think that parents should
let their children have their own rooms.

英検準二級

Answer 1

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taka

全体のまとめ方は、とても素晴らしいと感じます。
ただ、we/our/us よりも they/their/them の方が良いと思います。
参考にしてください。

I think that parents should let their children have [their] own rooms. 〇
I have two reasons. 〇
First, [we] can [consentrate] on study. → First, [they] can [concentrate] on study [more]. ※自室の方がより多く学習できる
This is because it is quiet. 〇
Second, [we] can protect [our private(形容詞)]. → Second, [they] can protect [their privacy(名詞)].
So [we] increase free time. → So [they] have more free time.
Therefore, I thiink that parents should let their children have their own rooms. 〇
【別解答】
Yes, I think parents should let their children have their own rooms. (12)
I have two reasons. (4)
First, it gives them a space to be alone, think, study and relax. (13)
It can also help them become more independent. (8)
Second, they become responsible for keeping their rooms clean and tidy. (11)
Therefore, I thiink that parents should let their children have their own rooms. (11) <59 words>

Y

ありがとうございます！

今の場合は対象が子供たちですが、もし対象がpeopleの時もtheyなのでしょうか？それとも、自分も含めるって考えてweですか？

Y

考えてweでしょうか？

taka

people → they/their/them になります。
但し、Japanese people は we/our/us が代名詞になります。

Y

なるほど、ありがとうございます！

taka

You're welcome!😊