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実戦問題
Write an essay on the given TOPIC.
Use TWO of the POINTS below to support your answer.
Structure: Introduction, main body, and conclusion
● Suggested length: 120-150 words
TOPIC
Agree or disagree: Modern technology can improve our ability to communicate
POINTS
Clarity of communication
· Accessibility
· Depth of communication
• Time
100 (E) PAS (E)
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I think modern technology can
• improve our ability to communicate
I have two reasons. To
begin with, Using smartphone is
good for our accessibility. For
Example, whenever we want to wake
friends, we can make friends
easily. Generating social media, we
can find people of the
same age
and hobbies, By
doing so, we will build good
relation. Also, we can talk
with foreigner. The country doesult
watter on the social media.
In the second reasons, time
due to communicate is very
quickly on the Internet. For
Instance, if we want to say.
Happy new year! "to
many people,
we can send message at the
Same Time in LINE. Thaetore,
modern technology is conventent
to use communitate someone.
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