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Do you think it is a good idea for people to have a car?

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I think that it is a good idea for people to have car. I have two reasons.
First, it is easy for people to move from place to place.
They do not worry to change train and bus. Second, cars are helpful when we go shopping. We don't need to carry heavy bags.

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zmic

It is well written 👍! I have a few remarks:

✅ First, it is easy for people to move from place to place.
✅✅ First, it makes it easy for people to move from place to place.
✅✅ First, it makes it easier for people to move from place to place.

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❌ They do not worry to change train and bus.
✅ worry about
🟠 They do not worry about changing train or bus.
✅✅ They don't need to worry about changing train or bus.

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✅ Second, cars are helpful when we go shopping. We don't need to carry heavy bags.
✅✅ Second, cars are helpful when we go shopping because we don't need to carry heavy bags.

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参考になれば嬉しいです
✅ I hope this is helpful!

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