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Given what you are communicating, I think the final paragraph is good. I have found nothing wrong with your writing.
If I was the testing monitor, however, I might have taken off points because I don't see how point one and point two are really related except as reasons for you liking picnics.
I like Japan. I have two reasons. People are nice, and manga comes from Japan. People being nice has nothing to do with manga and making sandwiches has nothing to do with taking walks on sunny days. If they are two different paragraphs on the same topic, that would be okay, but in one paragraph where you do not continue your narrative, you should make the reasons a little more related.
I like to have picnics for two reasons. One reason is it is fun to meet friends for lunch. Second, I like to take walks with my friends and when we go on a picnic, we can do both of these things together.
The over all theme of being with friends and enjoying picnic activities tie these two activities together in one paragraph.
Remember a good paragraph has a good open that shows a connecting point between the points you are saying and the final word shows the importance of why both points are important.
じゃ
何でpicnicが好きですか
Picnicだけじゃなく
二つのする事は同じ目的なtheme
たとえべ
友達いっしうする事
いっしょうに食べるとこえんにさんぴをする
いっしょうに話すと楽しいする事
しぜんこと
美しいばしょうと歩くが好き
おもしろいしぜんばしょうと気持ちが良いいな空気
何の二つ事が好きですか
りょうりとこえんにさんぴがいっしうに事がみえません それでりょうりでわなく友達いっしょう食べるとあとこえんの行く事をかんがいまsじたれば
もっと良くthemeが見える
それで
最小文章はpicnic が好きです
次は二つの目的がありまづ
友達いっしょう。。。と
友達いっしょう。。。
最後それだからpicnicする事が良いなする事と思います
そのぐらいたとべば
わかりました！すいません何回もありがとうございます！
だいじょうぶ 私は本当英語先生の心持っていると思いますだから生徒さんは良く分かるまで教えたいです
何回何回も良いでしょう
もし先生は1回か３回かの後つかれましたればその人は本当に先生じゃないと思います
もし生徒は答えだけお願うがほしればそれでおこっている何で生徒さんの学校行くのいみは学ぶために
Okay?
If you don't understand my answer please ask me again and again. As long as it is to understand and not just for an answer to write on a paper then I am happy to help.
長文ありがとうございます！
最初の方と最後の方の訳よくわからないので教えてもらえませんか？