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英検準1級のライティングが毎回悪いです。

1回目
内容 3/4 、構成 1/4 、語い 3/4 、文法2/4

2回目
内容 1/4、構成1/4、語い3/4、文法3/4 こんな感じで毎回ライティングの点数が1番低いです。

2回で共通しているのは、構成が1点であることと 満点が1つもない事です。
これらを克服したいです。


自分が書いた2つのライティングを写真で載せますので、アドバイスをどうかお願いします。
拙い文章ですが宜しく御願いします。

Will Societies
fature?
with low birthrites face.
Prents: Workforce, Foodshortige, Technological Innovation,
Environment problem.
I disagree with the idea. I have two reasons to
my opinion.
to get on
important to
First of all, it doesn't cause a
foodshortage
If the number of people increased, Some people who
Live ChrA Parthe popularity decreased, it with bat
country can't get the food enough.
if
food.
That is
Cause
food problem.
a Crisis in the
not
cause
Płoblem
Second of all,.
it doesn't cause an environmental
problem. These days, many trash is in ocean and
on the ground. This kind of problem is Caused
by the people
decreased, the number of trash will
inclined.
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Support
In conducian, I think that low birth raten twon't
food shortage and an enviroment
a
Is marraige becoming less important today than
it was in the past ?!
I agree with the idea. I have two reasons to
support my opinion...
university.
ability of their studying, their
much
First of all, having children cost much money.
It goes saying Therefore, to support their
that these days many students
parents must pay
money.
Secord of all, some women wants to live alone.
(Vowadays, the number of women
is
who is working
increasing. As a result, they can have enough
money to live by themself so they don't think it is
necessary to marry.
increasing is
is becoming less important.
In conclusion,
I think that their money problem
and the number of people who want to be independent
the problem that the marraige
is

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