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TOPIC
Some people say that Japan should accept more people from other
countries to work in Japan. Do you agree with this opinion?
POINTS
■ Aging society
■ Culture
▪ Language

I agree with this opinion, (5) I have two reasons.
First = they can learn about Japan. (6)
They
can learn about not only techniques but also (9)
Japanese culture and language.
Also, most of people who come to Japan to work
are from developing country
(+13) <39>
If they learn some techniques and bring back them,
their country will Improve more faster than before.
In addition, The reason why they come to Japan is (58)
they can earn money more than their country. (66)
So, To work hard, they can earn money in Japan. <767
These reasons,
I agree with this opinion.
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