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英検準1級のライティングの添削をお願いします。

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英検ライティング③
Topic: Should rich people be required to pay higher taxes?
Points: Government funding, Equality, Wort incentive, Competitiveness.
I
with the idea. I have two reasons to support my opinion.
agree
First of all, all people should be equal. These days, the number
of people who don't work are being increased. Therefore,
to protect their human rights, the government should give
money to them. As a result, they don't feel uncomfortable
to live.
Second of all, the government could control the money.
If rich people pay higher tax, the goverment could use
their money to support
many
easily operate money in hy people and also, they can
economy is being recession.
In conclusion, I hope that rich people will pay many tax
to protect poor people and to improve our economy.

英検

Answer 1

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えええ

the number of A の時主語は、the numberになるので動詞は単数扱いになります。なのでisです。それから、increasはどちらでもいいですが、よく長文とかだと能動になってる気はします。内容的な部分で、人権を守るためにお金を与える、言い換えれば、お金を与えることで人権を守ることができるになりますが少し因果関係にズレがあるように感じます。ですから、その後に生活のことを書いているので、ここで生活の安定について書くと論理的にも良くなると思います。あくまで参考程度です。