Question

いちご

英検2級英作文訂正お願いします🥹🥹
お題は、学校が生徒のスマホ、タブレットの使用を授業で認める考えについてです。
私が考えた意見
1動画学習できることできる
2インターネット化に慣れることができる

2. Today, more and more schools allow students to
use smartphone and
tablets in class. Do you think this is a good idea?
I think that it is good idea that more and more schools allow students
to use smartphone and tablets in class.
I have
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can learn
two reasons why I think so.
First, if we use smartphone and tablets, in class, wie
about somethings by vide: Video makes it easy to imagine about
dearning things.
Second, if smartphone and tablets are introduced, we can get used
to Internet. Therfore, we can adapt Internet society, 13
For the two reasons mentioned about,
I belive that sharing smanthope and tablets in class is good idea.

Answer 1

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きのこ

蛍光ペンで引いたところがすぐに減点を食らうところです。
by vide →by video
〜mentioned about→〜mentioned above

あと気になるとしたら、1つ目の理由はとてもいいのですが、英語にうまく表現出来ていないかもしれないです。
例えば、
Students can use electronic devices such as smartphones and tablets to look up what they don’t know or understand in class.I’m sure that sometimes,images on the Internet about something connected the class can help them understanding the class’s contents.

という感じで書くと、メリットが伝わりやすいかと思いました。参考程度にどうぞ

いちご

ありがとうございます！