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英作文の添削お願いします。
近年、政府は高齢者が年金をもらう年を65歳より遅くする計画を立てている。それが実行される時の利点と欠点を述べよ。

In my opinion,nowadays young people are distressed by the obligation that they must pay tax for elderly people because the number of young people in Japan is less than that of elderly people.So,if the plan is put into action,young people’s burden will decrease.On the other hand,I can think of some bad points about it.For example,some elderly people can work powerful,but others can’t physically work as they wish.Such people wouldn’t live because they can’t receive the living expenses.For these points,it is difficult to judge whether the plan is good or not.