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nana

My favorite person is Florence Nightingale. This is because,she did some great things.
For example,she helped many people in the Crimean War. She devotedly cared for the soldiers.
Also,she founded a nursing school and created the basics of nursing. What impressed me was her actions like this. When I heard this story,I thought it was amazing to do something for others and I also want to do something for people.
Therefore,I like the nightingale who did wonderful things for others.

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