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When I was in junior high school, I was in the judo club. I chose it for no reason, so I didn't really like it. I didn't enjoy the club activities every day. I met one teacher at a time. Even though he was 60 years old, he practiced with us. He enjoyed it better than we do. I thought I would try my best it thanks to teacher.We taught the teachers how to enjoy judo and the importance of working hard. I practiced hard every day to give back to him. He always supported us every game. I was really glad to have met him. Unfortunately,he died of an illness. However, I love him still now.

1 . Answer in a short essay between 120 and 150 words in English.
(鹿児島大学)
What is the kindest thing anyone has done for you? Explain what
the person did for you and why you felt it was so kind.

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Answer 1

Emma

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I met one teacher at a time →
One day, I met a teacher.

He enjoyed it better･･･ はbetterではなくmore

I thought I would try my best it thanks to teacher.
→ His positive attitude encouraged me to work harder. (かなり変えてますがこういうことが言いたかったと推測)

We taught ･･･ of working hard.
→ He taught us how to ･･･

to give back to him
→in return for his support

He always supported us every game. → at every game

I love him still now.
→締めなのでせめて、His kindness and support were unforgettable for me and still stay in my heart. などなど、何かしらかっこつけましょ😊