Question

Y

英検準二級のライティング採点お願いします。

Do you think it is better for people to live in the city or in the countryside?

I think that it is better for me to live in
in
the city. I have the traders. First, it is very
• convenient. There are many suparmakets and
convenient Stores the day. Second, there
are a lot of hospitals. If we become sick,
we can be seen by doctors soon.
Therefore, I think that it is better for me
to live in the city.

英検準二級

Answer 1

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taka

〇Do you think it is better for [people] to live in the city or in the countryside?
作文の構成と内容は、ほとんど完璧！
ただ、一人称(I/my/meあるいはwe/our/us)ではなく三人称(they/their/them)にする方が良いと思います。

I think that it is better for [me] to live in the city. → I think that it is better for [people] to live in the city.
First, it is very convenient. 〇
There are many supermarkets and [convenient] stores. → There are many supermarkets and [convenience] stores.
※コンビニ convenience store
Second, there are a lot of hospitals. 〇
If [we] become sick, [we] can [be seen by doctors] soon. ※受動態にする必要性は？
→ If [they] become sick, [they] can see a doctor soon.
Therefore, I think that it is better for [me] to live in the city. → Therefore, I think that it is better for [people] to live in the city.
【別解答】
I think living in the city is better for most people because there are more jobs, schools, and activities. (19)
On the other hand, the countryside is quieter and less crowded, which some people may prefer. (16)
Therefore, it really depends on what people value more: a convenient life or a peaceful environment. (16)
Personally, I like living in the city better. (8) <59 words>

参考にしてください。

Y

なるほど。ありがとございます！

taka

My pleasure!😊