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英検準2級の英作文の添削をお願いしたいです。

Do you think it is good for children to watch TV?

No, I do not think so. I have two reasons. First, children all should study hard.
I think that it is no use watching TV. Second, watching TV is bad for their eyes.
If they keep watching it, they will not able to see clearly.
For these reasons, I do not think it is good for children to watch TV.

英作文 意見文

Answer 1

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添削してみました。参考になれば。

First, children all should study hard.
I think that it is no use watching TV.
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First, all children should study hard instead of watching TV.

If they keep watching it, they will not able to see clearly.(もし彼らが見続けたなら、彼らははっきり見ることができなくなるでしょう)
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If they watch TV too much, their eyesight will be badly affected. (もし彼らがテレビを観すぎたら、彼らの視力に悪い影響をおよぼすでしょう)

他の文は良いと思います。

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Xx_Saskia_xX

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