Some people say that Japan should use the Internet for people to vote in elections. Do you agree with this opinion?
❌ I agree that should use Internet to vote in elections.
✅ I agree that Japan should use the Internet to vote in elections.
🟠 This essay will explain two main reasons for my argument.
✅ This essay will explain the two main reasons for my opinion.
✅ I will give two arguments for my opinion.
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❌ First, it would be necessary to elections voting in Japan,
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❌ This is partly because we have a lot of jobs and haven't enoght time,
✅ This is partly because we have a lot of jobs and (we) haven't enough time,
✅ This is partly because we have a lot of jobs and (we) haven't got enough time,
✅ This is partly because we have a lot of jobs and (we) don't have enough time,
✅ so we can't go to vote.
✅ so we can't go vote.
✅ This is partly because we have a lot of jobs and (we) don't have enough time, so we can't go vote.
✅✅ This is partly because many of us have busy jobs, so we don't have enough time to go vote.
✅✅ This is partly because many people have busy jobs, so they don't have enough time to go vote.
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❌❌ <use the Internet> have <a good effect>
❌ <using the Internet> have <a good effect>
✅ <using the Internet> has <a good effect>
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❌ on cost
✅ on the cost
✅ on costs
✅ on the cost(s) of running an election
❌ Second, using the Internet for worker to vote has a good effect on costs.
❌ for worker
✅ for workers
🟠 Second, using the Internet for workers to vote has a good effect on costs.
🟠 Second, using the Internet for workers to vote has a positive effect on costs.
🤔 this is true not only for workers, but for everyone
✅ Second, using the Internet for people to vote has a positive effect on costs.
✅✅ Second, using the Internet for voting has a positive impact on the cost(s) of running an election.
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❌❌❌ For example, paper of writing and collect volunteer
❌ paper of writing
🟠 writing paper
✅ paper ballots
❓ collect volunteer
🤔 Usually volunteers are not paid, but I don't know elections in Japan work.
🟠 For example, paper ballots and paying volunteers to collect the votes.
✅ Such costs include paper ballots and paying volunteers to collect the votes.
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❌ For the reasons mention above,
✅ For the reasons mentioned above,
❌ Japan ought on use the Internet to vote.
✅ Japan ought to use the Internet to vote.
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✅ I hope I made no mistakes.
✅ I hope this is helpful!
