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This is well written. 上手に書かれていると思います👍
✅ Firstly, it is important for us to broaden our perspective.
🟠 Studying abroad contributes to knowing a lot of things,
✅ Studying abroad contributes to knowing more about the world,
✅ Studying abroad contributes to our general knowledge,
✅ Studying abroad contributes to our general knowledge of the world,
❓ Secondly, relationships are one of the critical factors.
✅ Secondly, relationships are a critical factor in our personal development.
🟠 makes us happy
✅ is beneficial
❌ cluture of another countries
✅ the culture of other countries
✅ the culture of another country
🟠 have an interest in the culture of other countries
✅ study the culture of other countries
✅ learn about the culture of other countries
✅ Studying abroad is beneficial because we can interact with various people beyond (our) borders and learn about the culture of other countries.
✅ Studying abroad allows us to interact with various people beyond (our) borders and learn about the culture of other countries.
🟠 For these reasons mentioned above, ...
✅ For the reasons mentioned above, ...
✅ For these reasons, ...
I hope this is helpful!
ありがとうございます😭