Question

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今私は中1です。小6から独学で英語を勉強しています。準2級の過去問の中でライティングがあるんですが塾にも行っていないので採点してくれる人がいなくて困っています。誰か採点していただければとても助かります。
問題は
Do you think parents should take children to museums?
否定と肯定の意見をどちらも書きました。できれば何故間違いなのか解説もしていただけるとこれからの勉強に繋がるのでお願いしたいです。写真見にくくてすみません!

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Yes, I think so O
No. I don't think so.
Yes J
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I have two reasons.
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parents should take there children to museum.
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First, parents.
learn thire children in museum,
Because there are many interesting things in museum.
Second, Have to know have many things when they are children.
So, parents have to take children to museums
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Nos
No, I don't think so parents should take children to museumsins
I have two reasons. And
they are going to feel like boel.
First, Because most children don't like museums. So, they should a
take thire children to park.
Second, If thire children will go to the museums that like to say
I want go home" and " I'm hungry" or « I'm sleepy".