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英検2級のライティングです。
稚拙な部分もありますが、文法的な間違いがあるかないか、時制の正誤を教えていただきたいです。

I do not agree that all people should be able to enter museums for free. I have two reasons why I do not agree. First, museums need a lot of money to maintain displayed things. If they do not get any entrance fees, they will get less money, and it will become hard to keep displayed things in a good condition. Second, too many people will come to museums. It will be busy, and they will not be able to enjoy displayed things. For these reasons, I have to say that entrance fees should not be free.

英検 ライティング

Answer 1

y.takano

ほぼ問題ないと思います。
too many people will come to museums. にif it's free,を付けたいのとそのあとのbusyはcrowdedの方が良いくらいですかね。
もし語数の問題で削ったならthey will get less money, がいらないですね。お金を取らなければ受け取るお金が減るって冗長なので。