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語数の目安…50〜60語

QUESTION
Which do you think is better for people, borrowing books from libraries or buying books at stores?

自分の解答
I think that buying books at stores is better than borrowing books from library.
I have two reasons.
First, we can write on books that are bought at stores. But, we can't write on books that are borrowed from libraries.
Secound, we can read books anytime.
so, I think that biying books at stores is better.
(56語)

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回答

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I think that buying books at stores is better than borrowing from libraries.
I have two reasons.
First, we can write anything on the books we bought.
Second, we can read them at any time we want.
On the other hand, we have to keep the library-books clean before returning them.
So I think buying books is better than borrowing from libraries.
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I think buying books from stores might be a better choice for me.
First at all, we are not allowed to write anything in borrowed books. But it’s okay that taking note everywhere in your own book.
Second, borrowed books usually only allow us to take books home for a week. Reading books under time pressure will be the last thing I want to do. So I would like to buy books from stores.

(74語)
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