Question

肥姨🌸

可以幫忙挑出文法的錯誤，並改正嗎？

Hello professors,thanks for having me

My name is Lily, my Chinese nameis 林念其.
lam from DongShan Junior High schoolin Taipei
city.

lam afriendly, optimistic and upbeat girl

lam anambivert person so change my
personality based on the topic which | was
interestedin.

When it comes to talk about clothing 1 will
passionate discuss with them。

However, if someone is talking about spider or
frog 1wont proactive to talk over with them。
Inmyfreetime, |always go shopping and

watching movie with my friends or family-
lenjoy going aboard because it can experience

different local customs, new things and get rid
ofallthe pressure-

ve always had great interest in English, is

definitely my favorite subject.

1think English is an international language-
ltplays an important role whetherin schoolor
inthe future.

Especially the knowledge and international
perspectives related to business management
are moreimportant

ltisthe necessary ability to set foot on the
international stage in the future.

That's why I! want to learn English, thereforel

am interested inthe Department of Applied
English.

Inthe near future, | hope lhaveachance to

develop my interest and ability in Department
of Applied English.

lbelievelcan bring what ! 1earn into full play in
my profession field.

Therefore, its apleasure to meet you, and !

hope ! havea chance to get to know you

betterinthe future.

文法

Answer 1

Darren

首先，我不知道你寫這個的目的是什麼？
你的內容上，什麼都講是不符合在英文寫作上的原則，這樣會讓讀者不知道你想說什麼、目的和用途是什麼。
此外，單字、片語用詞和文法也有錯誤，也包含有中式英文。
因此，建議你先想清楚你寫這個的目的是什麼？是一封書信嗎？如果是，那麼書信有書信體的格式，必須遵守，不然只會顯得非常地沒有禮貌唷！

Darren

另外，可以先用找出你的目的的一句話是什麼，再來列點的方式說明。這樣可以幫助你釐清你想說什麼。

Marceline

I’m a bit harsh for some.