添削お願いします。
According to the graph, I would like to state the three points.
To begin with, from 1800 to 2012, global, average life expectancy was increasing from 32 years to y/o years. It seems that this is because medical technology has been developing.
Secondly, the lower the cumulative share of the world population such as India the lower the life expectancy at birth. Meanwhile, the higher the cumulative share of the world population such as the USA and German the higher the life expectancy at birth. It seems that the cumulative shore of the world population and life expectancy are related.
Thirdly there are countries like South Korea, Spain, and Japan the cumulative share and life expectancy increased. It seems that this is because these countries are economically grown.
Life Expectancy at Birth
90
80
70
60
50
40
30
20
Life Expectancy of the World Population in 1800, 1950, and 2012
Somalia
Nigeria
Mozambique
Sierra Leone
Somalia
Bhutan
India
India
10 und UVO
naut no
370qmi
Afghanistan
India
Rwanda
South Korea
MOT
7 ST GR
II
1/4
Pakistan
China
Nigeria
Spain
Russia
Russia
Indonesia
South Korea
Brazil
1/2
Brazil
China
China
USSR
Cuba
Cumulative Share of the World Population
Japan
France
3/4
South Korea
Costa Rica
USA
Mexico
Germany
Canada
Japan
Spain
Australia
Germany
Norway
USA
Belgium
Netherlands
Germany USA
2012
Global average
life expectancy:
70 years
1950
Global average
life expectancy:
48 years
1800
Global average
life expectancy:
32 years
1
[Adapted from Max Roser et al., "Life Expectancy," in Our World in Data, 2019]
24 2021 (Writing)
早稲田大-国際教養
Write a paragraph in ENGLISH answering the question
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below.
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From the chart on the following page, what trends and other
important information can be identified? For example, you may focus
on the movement of the three different lines, countries that stand out
over time, or any other points you can identify.