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英検2級writing
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●以下の英文を読んで その内容を英語で要約し、解答欄に記入しなさい。
●語数の目安は 45 語~ 55 語です。
●解答欄の外に書かれたものは採点されません。
●解答が英文の要約になっていないと判断された場合は、0点と採点されることがあります。 英文をよく読んで
から答えてください。
In recent years, AI has become increasingly familiar in daily life. In particular, the introduction of
AI systems into cars is attracting a lot of attention. Car manufacturers in Japan and other countries
have been focusing their time and efforts on developing self-driving cars. Within the next few
decades, they may become commonplace.
What are the benefits of self-driving cars? First, by having an automated driving system control
driving, the physical and mental burden on the driver will be significantly reduced. Also, there may
be fewer traffic accidents because driving errors by drivers will be reduced.
On the other hand, there are some concerns about self-driving cars. First, until self-driving cars
are mass-produced, manufacturing costs are expected to be very high. Additionally, if the programs
controlling self-driving cars are rewritten through hacking or other means, it may lead to accidents
or crimes. Therefore, it is essential to ensure the security of the systems.
解答欄
Self-driving cars may become commonplace. It
can
reduce physical and mental burden on the driver and
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be fewer traffic accidents. However. It costs are
expected to be very high. Also if it hacking or other
means, it may lead to accidents or crimes, so
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it is essential to ensure the security of the
systems.
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英検2級

Answer 1

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添削が必要な箇所です。

2文目
It can reduce ~ on the driver までは良いです。
and ~以下は
~ and prevent traffic accidents.
prevent = 防ぐ、予防する

3文目
一般動詞の costs と、be動詞の are が並ぶのは間違い。
However, its cost is expected to be very high.
或いは
However, it is expected to be expensive.

4文目
If it hacking or other means, の部分は間違い。
こう書き直せます。
Also, if the programs of the car are hacked, it may lead to accidents or crimes.

5文目
書き言葉(文章)で使う場合、接続詞の so は文頭で使わない。(口語や話し言葉、カジュアルな文では使われる)
この場合、So の代わりに Therefore, (まとめ、結論の文頭に使う、かしこまった感じ)、又はThus, (「従って」という意味で So に近い感じ)を使います。文頭に置くので、単語のすぐ後にコンマを付けます。

他の部分はよいです。