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🐱 ※プロフィール見て欲しいです🙇‍♀️

英作文の添削をお願いします！
文字数数えるため変換が見にくいです( ; ; )
申し訳ないです。
よろしくお願いします。

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TOPIC
●以下の TOPICについて、 あなたの意見とその理由を2つ書きなさい。
●POINTS は理由を書く際の参考となる観点を示したものです。 ただし、こ
れら以外の観点から理由を書いてもかまいません。
●語数の目安は80語 ~100語です。
These days, people are thinking more about manners in public places.
Do you think that people using a camera should have better manners in
public places?
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POINTS
Privacy
Memories
• Safety
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No.
I think people using a
camera should have better manners,
in public places. I have
7 two reasons. Firstly, we have
the issue of
privacy.
Some
people don't like take photos.
If people take photos without
other's permission, people who don't
like photos will be hearted
their
privacy. Secondly, camera can
memory as reccords. People who
don't like camera won't go.
outside, because they will
afraid of taking pictures. Therefore,
he
people using
a camera should think
buer before useing it, and
I want them to protect
everyone's privacy.