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TOPIC
Today, some customers ask delivery companies to put packages by their
doors instead of receiving them directly. Do you think this kind of
service will become more common in the future?
POINTS
Convenience
Damage
Security
I think that

Date
First, it
I think that this kind of service will become in
the future. This eassy will explection two main reasons for
my argement in terms of convenience and security.
would be necesary to receiving yours things of not direct.
This is partly because. If you have a disease when.
you can't meet people. Second, put packages by nealy your
house instead of delivery companies have a good effect on
security. Nowadays, many building raise security systems. For the
I reasons mention above, delivery service will become more devoloping
in the future.

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