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TOPIC
Agree or disagree:
Movies and TV programs have more
negative influence than positive on how
young people behave.

Some people say that
TV programs
hot have
how young people behave.
I agree with
reasons
on
based
not good effect
is
cases, if you watch TV programs
hegative influence
On the other hand,
idea and
One
In
(4 Your
movie
than positive on
hand others
have
You can
The other
two
is that,
reasoh
many cases, if
communication skill
reducing time
cutting back on
and
main
it
were
Say hot:
oh
people.
lot of time,
)
is likely to get worse and worse because of
by
to
talk with your family andar friends. However,
the amount of time to spend watching TV.
connection with them.
get greater
reason
is that
you can get health. This is because
Stopping watching TV can provide a good opportunity to improve the
eyesight. If you
hot for this attempt, you couldn't have
Such an oppotunity.
All in all, it is
Shouldn't watch TV programs many time.
Date
U
the latter
Communication and
health.
for the reasons mentioned avobe that people.