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いちご

英検2級英作文対策したものです。
もうすぐで試験が近いのでどなたか訂正してくれたら、とても助かります🥹🥹
よろしくお願いします🙇‍♀️🙏
1互いの国の文化交流ができる
2他国語を学ぶ良い機会となる
的なことを書きました!!

Q. Some people say that Japan should accept more people from
Tu Japan. Do you agree this opinion?,
other countries to work
(80~100)
ⒸAging society
8 Culture
Language
500(24)
I agree that Japan accept more people from other countries
to work in Japan. I have two reasons why I think so.
first, If more people from other countries, we may know
foreign culture Also, Japanese culture is known by foreigh
people. It is a good opportunity
to learn each other's
culture. (54)
Second, Japanese can have opporotunity to talk with
foreign people. We can practice other country's languages. (1)
For the two reasons mentioned above,
I belive that accepting more foreign workers is a good
idea for Japan.
89語

Answer 1

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きのこ

すぐ減点を食らうのは、ここら辺だと思います。

If more people from other countries,〜

→If more people from other countries come to Japan to find out jobs,〜

きのこ

もし、僕が書くとしたら、こう書きます。
参考程度にどうぞ。

Firstly,today,aging society is an big problem in Japan.That’s why,accepting foreign workers is one of the key approaches to deal with this challenge.

Secondly,the increase of foreigners who want to work in Japan can lead to good chances to share with cultures,languages or ideas each other.

For these reasons,I’m sure that admitting foreigners to work in Japan is big merits for Japanese society.

いちご

ありがとうございます！
他にミスとかはありませんか？🥲

きのこ

Japanese culture is known by foreign people.のとこが少し気になりました。外国人労働者受け入れにより、日本の文化がもっと多くの人に知られる的なことを言いたいのかなーと思ったんですけど、それで合ってますか？

もし、そうなら、

Japanese culture can be known to many people over the world by sharing with each other’s culture.

とかの方が、言いたいことがもっと伝わるんじゃないかなーと思いました。

いちご

ありがとうございます！