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ちなみに問題は

Today in Japan, many buildings and public areas have a lot of lights for decoration, such as the lights used during Christmas. Do you think this is a good idea?

4 ライティング解答欄
I
Free with the opinion that many buildings and
public areas have
lot of lights for
decoration such as the lights used during
Christmas.
There are
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two
reasons for this.
5
. If
First, a lot of lights make public areas safe.
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there were
not
'any I lights, it would be dark and
it would be easy
for
others. Second, It
people to do something had for
become beautiful and lighter
will feel happy.
In public place. Then
we
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+
1(
For those reasons, I think that
many
buildings and
public areas have a lot of lights for decoration
the lights used during Christmas is
such as
good idea.
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英検 英作文

Answer 1

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Xx_Saskia_xX

もっとよくなるように添削してみました。

There are two reasons for this.
→ There are two reasons to support my idea.

If there are not any lights, ~
→ If there are not enough lights, ~

it would be dark and it would be easy for people ~
→ it would be dark and not safe for people walking pass the areas.

Second, it becomes beautiful and lighter ~
と次の文
Then, we will feel happy.
をつなげます。
→ Second, it makes the public places beautiful and brighter, making people happy.

最後の結論の文は、一行目をそのまま繰り返すのは良くないので、言い方を変えて書きます。
Therefore, I think that decorating the streets and public spaces with a lot of lights is a good idea not just during the Christmas season.

→ That will make people in happy mood.

Yucca_🦕

ものすごくわかりやすいです！！
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Xx_Saskia_xX

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