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将来、人々はいっそう長生きをするようになると思いますか？

I think that more people will buy locally produced food in the future.

Firstly, the more they eat it, the better local economics is. In many cases, if they do not buy food that grow near their towns, the local economist is likely to get worse and worse. However, by buying it, they will make local farmer.

Secondly, this attempt will become a public concern.For example it can provide a good opportunity for them to consider the environment. Wihtout their trial, they all could have such an opportunity.

In conclusion, in terms of local economics and the environment, I agree with this opinion.

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