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Today some young people do not want to start working for large companies. Do you think the number of these people will
increase in the future? (POINTS: Income, Opportunity, Stress)
Answer
Idon't think the number of these people will increase in the future. I have two reasons why I think so.
To begin with, There's more income than normal companies in large companies and maybe it is not hard to work there
because there a lot of smart people.
In addition, Ifl work in normal companies, I will be stressed because of little rest. but, large companies are different. You can
get more rest. so it will not be stressful.
For these reasons I don't think the number of these people will increase in the future.