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I think that more people will buy bottled water at stores. 〇
I have two reasons. 〇
First, the country(S1) <which(S2) can drink(V2) water safety> is(V1) not many(C1).
✕which(＝the country) can drink 国は飲み物を飲みません
→ There aren't many countries <where people(S) can drink(V) safe water(O)>.
人々が安全な水を飲むことができる国は多くありません。
More and more people have ✕sick(形容詞) caused(過去分詞) by dirty water.
→ Many people(S) become(V) sick(C) because of dirty water.
多くの人々が汚染された水が原因で病気になります。 ※because of … …のために＜原因・理由＞
Thus we must drink safety(名詞) water(名詞) to suffer from illnesses.
従って、病気で苦しむために私達は安全水を飲まなければいけない。
→ Thus, we must drink safe(形容詞) water in order not to suffer from illnesses.
従って、病気で苦しまないために、私達は安全な水を飲まなければいけない。
※Thus, S＋V～ in order not to ～ ～しないように＜目的＞
Second, bottled drink which hold water of mountain contain a lot of minerals.
→ Second, bottle drinks(S) <containing(現在分詞＝形容詞：前の名詞を修飾) water from mountains> have(V) a lot of minerals(O).
※✕hold water 水を保持する △water of mountain／〇water (coming) from mountains
It is very important for us to keep our health. 〇
For these reasons, I believe that more people should drink bottled water.
→ For these reasons, I believe that more people will buy bottled water at stores and should drink it.
※最初の質問に対する回答をまず明確に再提示して、その後自分の意見(should drink it)を付け加えるのがベターだと思います。
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My pleasure!😊
添削ありがとうございます😭
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