Question

凛

英検２級のライティングです。
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It is often said that restaurants, and supermarkets should try
to reduce the amount of food that they throw away.
Do you agree this opinion?
I agree the opinion that restaurants and supermarkets
should try to reduce the amount of food that they thinw
I have two reasons
to support this opinion.
Firstly, It is bad for the enviroment two throw away
the food.
To throw away the food lead to global warming
Secondly,
reducing food waste is
one of critical
factors Developing contries have a lack of safe food
If wealthy countries reduce the amount of food
that they throw away, people in developing countries
will happy.
for these reasons
f
mentioned above,
I believe that we should reduce the amount of food
that the restraunts and supermaket's throw away,

英検

Answer 1

zmic

❌ I (don't) agree the opinion that...
✅ I (don't) agree with the opinion that...
✅ I (don't) support the opinion that...

❌ two throw away the food.
✅ to throw away the food.
✅✅ to throw away food.

<to throw away the food>と<throwing away food>は単数ですか
❌❌ To throw away the food lead to global warming.
✅ To throw away the food leads to global warming.
✅✅ Throwing away food leads to global warming.
✅✅ Throwing away food increases global warming, because more food needs to be produced.

❌ Reducing food waste is one of critical factors.
✅ Food waste is one of the critical factors of global warming.
✅ Food waste is a critical factor of global warming.
✅ Reducing food waste is a critical factor in reducing global warming.
✅ Reducing food waste is of critical importance for developing nations.

will + 動詞
❌❌ people in developing countries will happy.
❌ people in developing countries will be happy.
✅ people in developing countries will benefit.

2回指さないでください
❌ For these reasons mentioned above, ...
✅ For these reasons, ...
✅ For the reasons mentioned above, ...

zmic

While I was writing my answer, Omochi posted an excellent answer👍. I hope mine is still useful. 😇

凛

ありがとうございます😿助かります🙇‍♀️🙇‍♀️

Answer 2

omochi

添削しました。
参考になれば嬉しいです！

凛

ありがとうございます😿😿助かります🙇‍♀️🙇‍♀️