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Although boxing has a history of over a hundred years as an Olympic sport, some people argue that boxing and other sports based on physical violence should have no place in the Olympics. Do you agree with this statement? Write a paragraph giving one or more convincing reasons to support your position.(less than 100 words)

I agree with this statement. It is true that boxing
is recognized as a sport. Moreover boxing is popullar
all over the world. However, we have to consider
some negative points.
First, boxing is a dangerous sport and there are
a lot of accidents boxers may die.
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Second, boxing is to knock down opponents.
is problem on the moral. Boxing is against a human
moral. This will lead to violence of people
For these reasons, I argue that boxing and other
sports based on physical violence shoud have no place
in the Olympics.
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