Question

璃梨唯-Lily-

添削お願いします！

If
I met my favorite artists, I'd like to do many
things. First, I want to take pictures with them because
I can see the pictures whenever and I can remember that
time. Second, if I met some artists who play instruments,
I'd like to get some tools such as guitar
picks or drums
sticks. I will not use them but display them. Third,
I want them to sign on my belongings. However, if I really
favorite artist,
maybe I felt very nervous and
met
my
couldn't do
of them.
any

Answer 1

✨ 最佳解答 ✨

taka

文章の流れはこのままで良いと思います。
少し修正すれば、更に分かりやすい英文になります。

If I met my favorite artists, I’d like to do [many] things. 〇
→ If I met my favorite artists, I’d like to do [a few] things. ◎
First, I want to take pictures with them because I can see the pictures whenever and I can remember that time.
→ First, I want to take pictures with them because <whenever I see the pictures>, I can remember that time/moment.
最初に、彼らと一緒に写真を撮りたいと思います。なぜなら、＜いつその写真を見ても＞、その時のことを思い出すことができるからです。
Second, if I met some artists who play instruments, I’d like to get some tools such as guitar picks or drums sticks.
→ Second, if I met some artists who play musical instruments, I’d like to get some small tools such as guitar picks or drum sticks.
I will not use them but display them. 〇
→ I will not use them but display them in my room. ◎
Third, I want them to sign on my belongings. 〇
However, if I really met my favorite artist, maybe I felt very nervous and couldn’t do any of them.
→ However, if I really met my favorite artists, maybe I would feel very nervous and couldn’t do any of them.

参考にしてください。

璃梨唯-Lily-

ありがとうございます😌✨

taka

You're welcome!😊