Question

candy

請問文法有錯嗎？
yesterday， I feel hungry after my work was finished， so I want to the Japanese Restaurant ate dinner，I order a lot of different sushi. Then， my table was laid(放) much food quickly.
one hour later，I spend five thousand dollars on the dinner，
I was really shocked， because this restaurant sushi price more expensive. I told myself， when I went to any restaurant， I will ask the waiter the food price.

「第二部份:段落寫作」
题目:昨天下班後我覺得肚子很餓,所以我就去了一家日本料理餐廳。我點了各式各樣的壽司。很快
地,我的桌上就擺滿了食物。吃完後要付帳時,我很震驚這一餐竟然要價五千元。請依照下面
的圖片,寫一篇約50字的故事。注意:未依提示作答者,將予扣分。
Writing
Japanese
Restaurant
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$5,000

Answer 1

✨ 最佳解答 ✨

chou014

feel應該要用過去式；
去餐廳的want to應該是went to；
吃晚餐的吃不用把eat直接寫出來，應該是用表示目的的for dinner；
order也一樣要用過去式；
很快地，這個副詞用soon應該會比較適合；
後面基本上也是同樣的狀況，時態不一致、有的完整句前後沒有連接詞。
比較大的問題應該是because this restaurant sushi price more expensive這句，首先壽司的定價，你沒有寫出所有格；然後這個子句沒有動詞，後面的比較級因為沒有參照物我覺得怪怪的。

chou014

Yesterday, I was starving after work, so I went to a Japanese restaurant for dinner. I ordered all kinds of sushi I can get. Soon, the table was full of sushi. An hour later, when I finally finished my meal and was ready to pay, it caught me by surprise as the cashier told me that it costs me 5,000 dollars.
我的話大概是會這樣寫，給你參考看看。