Question

candy

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Today, at afternoon Alice went to department store with her daughter,but happened something.
At first ,they bought the clothes in the clothe store , when Alice chose her clothes , but her daughter was bored , she saw toy store, and she was very happy , she went to play toys, Alice pay money for clothes. At the same time , she found her daughter was missing
Alice was nervous , Finally a poilce officer took her daughter return the clothes store. Alice thanks to this police officer help.

Answer 1

Yu

In the afternoon, Alice went to the department store with her daughter, but something happened.
At first, they bought the clothes in the clothing store. Her daughter was bored when Alice chose her clothes. She was happy to see a toy store. She went to there and play with toy happily. When Alice payed money for clothes, she found her daughter was missing. At the end, a police officer took her daughter return to the clothing store. Alice thanked to the police officer for helping her to find her daughter.
嗯...這是直接把你文章錯誤的文法改正的（如果有其他人發現我有錯的話也請糾正我）這篇文章是作文嗎？還是翻譯而已，如果是作文的話是一篇很無聊的流水帳，可能要多背一些單字，以及連接詞的變化，文法的部分也要加強，時態要一致，注意主詞 動詞的位置，還有服裝店的單字是clothing store不是clothe store

Answer 2

耀勻

at the afternoon放後面，but something happened
第二段第二行but刪掉，the toy store , playing toys
paid , police officer's help 可供參考