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The new year,Jenny ate dinner with her family and relative ,she ate a lot of food and drank many bottles of juice.
A later day ,she was scary, because her weight was add to eighty kilogram, Jenny love beautiful ,therefore,she decide to go jogging every morning,and she tell herself：I couldn't eat a lot of food and drink next time.

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題目:過年時珍妮跟家人及親戚團聚,結果因大吃大喝而增胖了不少。請依照下面的圖片,第一
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寫had dinner 會更好
relative 是可數名詞 記得加s
scary是嚇人的的意思 應改為scared
但我覺得這裡可以改成She was shocked when she knew how many weights she had gained.
愛美不可以直接寫love beautiful beautiful 是形容詞
可以改成Jenny cared about her appearance so much.
後面時態變成現在式 可以加個Now
e.g. Now, she go jogging every morning and pay attention to her diet.