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英検二級の英作文の練習をしているのですが、写真の中でなにか添削するところはありますか？
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英作文
it is
I think such buildings will become more.
in the future.
First, if we will use
cor economize.
We
NO.
for example, we will not have to buy the water by
collecting rainwater. It can
some
DATE
roin mater in various ways,
use giving plants.
far
Second, rainwater is useful when we will be emergency.
example, water shorting.
is.
one
As
If we don't have eroght water,
method.
It help us
for these reasons, mary buildings collect roinmoter and
suit as
water
ther use it in
some
ways,
to plants. I think it is good intentions.
we
rain mater
-Topic
Today, many buildings collect rainwater and then
use it in various ways,
such as
to plants.
Do
you
become more compon
giving water
think such buildings will
In the future?