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英検準一級のwritingです。誰か、採点して欲しいです！できれば、この文を改善したものも教えて頂きたいです！お願いします！🙇‍♀️🙇‍♀️

文字数が全然足りないのですが、どうしたらいいですか？😢

《 書きたかったこと 》
・野菜は低価格なので、他の食べ物よりも安く買えること。
・野菜を食べれば、健康になる。野菜には沢山栄養が含まれているので、体が強くなる。

Grade Pre-1
20125
4
English Composition
40160×2,80~100
20025
2644
Write an essay on the given TOPIC.
Use TWO of the POINTS below to support your answer.
Structure: introduction, main body, and conclusion
Suggested length: 120-150 words
Write your essay in the space provided on Side B of your answer sheet.
Any writing outside the space will not be graded.
TOPIC
Agree or disagree: More people should become vegetarians in the
future
I agree that more people bhould beconme ne
vegetarions in the future.1 nave two reasons
t0 6upport my Opinion TO Degin witn,
vegetablen ore cheaper tnan food or fion,
meal. flour. And, becaube it is lewa Costi
people (con Duいy vegetables. se0ond, eating
vegetables is very healtn.I+l's contained
many nutriteク 50, chiloren ana clderly
vecome very うtronger. TPere f ore , I think
trat many peOPle bhould become veget&rians
more than now.
POINTS
Animal rights
Cost
Environment
Health

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