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英検準1級の英作文の添削をお願いします。

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Topic: Do
you
to fural areas after retirement?
think that it is beneticial to move from urban cities
I de not think it is beneficial to move from urban cities
p nural areas affer retirement. I have two reasorns to support
my opinion in terms of corvenience and isolation.
Fist, urben Life is more Convenient than raral Life.
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For example, we can buy things what we want immediately
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because there are. many stores near our house, Also. there are.
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a lot of trains lines, so wrban plople are enable to
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go eaythae
Second. urban ife is hot iselation, If we live rural areas,
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we wnuld not be saved by other pegple when a catastoraphy
Occers, I think Some buildings built at urban area are.
satey
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than rural area's brilding.
For these reasons, I think moving fom urban cities to rural areas
is pot beneficial.
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るぅ

こちらも見てみました。

ひとつ目にマークしたwhatですが、前にthingsの名詞があるので書き換えるならthatで、whatのままにしておくなら、thingsを消します。
あとは書き込んだとおりです。
train linesで電車の路線になります。

何かわからないところがあったらまた聞いてください😊

げすと

本当にいつもありがとうございます！助かります。