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R

英作文です
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Q. Do you think it is good for students to work
part - time?
A. I think it is good for students to work part-time,
First, they can earn many themselves. oriet
earn money.
It is good experience for they to
Second, they can learn many things.
By working part-time, they will learn how to work at society.
Therefore, I think working part-time is good for students
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✨ 最佳解答 ✨

そゆ

最初の文の、I think it is~の後に、
｢I have two reasons｣があると良いです！
また、2つ目の理由の後の、
｢By~｣は、｢For example｣のほうが簡潔になるかと！

誤字が数箇所🤏🏻
2文目｢many｣▶︎money
3文目｢they｣▶︎them

他にも見落としていたらすみません🙇🏻‍♀️

R

丁寧にありがとうございます！
とても助かりました😭