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I think that rich countries should
First
de velop
of
I
have two
all,
rich
Countries
has
a
lot of
on the other hand, poor countries
Countries
money. Therefore rich countries should found places where they can work
Second of all, helping poor countries
to develop there
but also to encourase rich countries's economic growth
do
reasons to support
my opinion.
have enough money
do
mare
to help poor
Countries
to
not
9
found facilities.
but many of poor
people and they
cah
not
work and earn
is not only
For example, rich countries
Can
sell their products
to the helpins
Countries
According
to
the
reasons
stated above, I think
developed
countries should do
more
to help developing
Countries
develop. and

• Write an essay on the given TOPIC.
• Use Two of the Points below to
support your answer.
• Structure: Introduction, main body,
●
and conclusion
Suggested length: 120-150 words
【TOPIC]
Do you think that rich countries should
do more to help poor countries
develop?
【POINTS)
•
Inequality
• Economic Growth
• Domestic Issues
•
Enough
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Answer 1

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⭐️Therefore:
...earn money(:) ❌Therefore rich countries should found places where they can work.
➡️
1️⃣ . Therefore,
..earn money(. Therefore, )⭕️rich countries should create job opportunities where they can work.
2️⃣；therefore,
...earn money（; therefore, ）⭕️rich countries should create job opportunities where they can work.

ぽちゃこ

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