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おもち

英検2級要約問題 添削お願い致します🙇‍♀️

When students go to university, they usually go to the campus and take
classes in classrooms with other students. However, there are other types of
classes for students to take. Some of them take online classes from home without
going to the campus.
What are some benefits of this? Online classes are helpful for students
living far away from the campus because they do not need to travel for long
periods of time. Moreover, in the case of recorded online classes, students can
watch recorded classes over and over again so that they can understand the
classes better.
However, some students may have problems with their computers or their
Internet connection during online classes. This can make it difficult to take the
classes smoothly. Also, if students do not go to the campus, they will have fewer
chances to see each other face-to-face and talk to other students. Because of this,
some students may feel lonely.

* Some university Students take online classes at home. By doing so, they don't have
to go to school. It helps students who live far away from school. Also, They can record classes
and learn again. Flowever, if their computer out of older, it's difficult to take
class. And, they can't meet in person. It makes them sad.

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悪魔

they don't have to go to school は、大学という意味になるか怪しいのでcollegeやuniversity を使うといいと思います。コンピューターが古いという話も要約にはあるのですが、本文にはないので書かないようにしましょう。out of older という表現もおそらく存在しないので…。They can't meet in person　だと、物足りないのでmeet と in の間にeach other入れたいですね。あと、lonely と sad　はやはり、ちがうので、もっと近い類義語で isolated, companionless を使うか、そのまま本文の表現を使うかです。わからないときは、そのまま使うのが得策かもしれません。

おもち

ありがとうございます！