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Do you think traveling by train is better than traveling by car?

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traveling by train is better
I think that
than traveling by cat, I have two reasons.
First, it makes travel easier and more
confortable.)
(31)
For example, they need
not drive car. Second, it really improves
the quality of travel in many ways.(+2)
That is because train is farster than car.
(50)

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