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お題は人々は健康のために運動をもっとすべきか？です
I think soから読んでいただけると嬉しいです！

you.
I think so. I have two reasons. First, they can
hearing from
lose their weights. By doing this, they will move
easily. Second
They are able to have great time because exercising make them
happy. That's why I think people bught to exercise more for their
health